Monday, February 2, 2009

Scarlet's Essay

Scarlet Caruso
English 9
Hamilton Salsich
2/5/09

Imprisonment and Freedom
An Essay on the themes of Shakespeare's The Tempest :

If you found yourself captured or imprisoned, what would you say to the person who caught you if they asked, "What would you like to see out of the single window you are permitted?". Also, when imprisoned what would you wish to be free as? Most people will never find themselves in this situation but it is very perplexing to think of what you would say or do. How would you deal with being caged like a bird?

If I was imprisoned the one sight I would want most to see out of my window would be of "The Bluff". The Bluff is a large hill on the island of Martha's Vineyard and it looks out on the everlasting ocean. The first reason I would want to see the view would be because at sunrise the scene is an inspiration for living. I would know that I may be imprisoned but there is a reason for life. I would know that I needed to carry on because it would be worth it in the end. Secondly, at night the stars assure me. They assure me that if I should die, imprisoned, there is an afterlife. I would be reminded of the song "Closing Time" and the words that they sing, "every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end." I would love to see the view from The Bluff because it is inspiring and uplifting.


I would like to be as free as a song. I would like to be a continuous flow of notes and melodies. There is no way to stop music from being made. Even when someone may press pause the music can continue on in your head, in your heart, in your soul. Also why I would want to be free as song is because you can create anything with music. You can create tunes, emotions, melodies with the notes you sing. Also the lyrics in songs can go anywhere. They could be meaningless ballad of nothingness or beautiful swirling words full of enough emotion to make someone cry. To me music can be anything and it seems to be an ideal freedom. I would like to be as free as music.

If I ever find myself captured I would be content if I had a window looking out on The Bluff and beyond. Yet even with that luxury, I would still wish that I could be free as music, flowing in and out of minds. Someone could never be completely joyous with confinement but to see a view that inspires could be a plus and you could dream of one day being as free as you want.

orange= FAST word
purple= tricolon

3 comments:

Kate Scott said...

Scarlet-
GOOD JOB! your essay was very god and nicely written. i really liked you tricolons and your fast words. I also really liked when you said, "They could be meaningless ballad of nothingness or beautiful swirling words full of enough emotion to make someone cry." that is very nicely written. Also, don't forget to put a subtitle!! other then that you will surly get an A+!
-Kate

Anonymous said...

Scarlet- I am very impressed by your writing. There were few mistakes that I spotted. The phrase, "and when imprisoned what would you wish to be free as?" doesn't fit that well. Instead of framing the whole essay in that repentance, how about you just expand with the topic "as free as" later. Also, in your last paragraph, I'm not sure the word blithe fits. Your first paragraph is very well written and gripping. Otherwise, this is a great essay.

pverhoeff said...

GREAT JOB SCARLET!!!!! The sentence, "I would like to be a continuous flow of notes and melodies." jumped out at me, and hooked me into reading more. Just to follow up on Kimo's comment, that whole sentence is a little confusing. I'm pretty sure it's a run-on. Also, I don't believe blithe is apt. Other than that, SUPER JOB! EXCELLTENT WRITING!