Monday, February 2, 2009

Kimos Essay

Kimo Gray
2.03.09
Mr. Hamilton Salsich
English 9

The Freedom of Confinement:
An Essay on Liberation through Imprisonment
I have felt imprisonment in my life. True, this had not felt anything like the confinement of the Holocaust, nor have I been incarcerated. But I have felt imprisonment. Though painful, it is something I must endure to appreciate my freedom. There will always be forms of imprisonment, but there are a variety of freedoms.
There are many forms of Imprisonment, be them physically or mentally, rightful or unjust. If I was to be imprisoned, there would only be one thing that could keep me happy, the song “Always Look on the Bright Side of Life” by Monty Python. This song is at heart, a funny song, and at 4:29 seconds long it may not seem very extensive, but I’ve had so many memories with this song, be them long car trips with my family to my friends and I trying to interpret the line “For life is quite absurd… And You must always face the curtain with a bow,” that reliving all these memories would take days. This song’s title truly speaks for itself, this is a song about how atrocious (FAST) the world can be and how strength can be found anywhere, and I find comfort in that. If I had to live in a place where I had no control over my life besides hearing this one song, then I could have the happiness that everyday sustains me. Every day my highlight is the same: coming home and getting a big hug from my little brother. I love him dearly, and I think even going away to school next year would be a sort of “imprisonment” in the sense that I wouldn’t get to see him every day. It would be great to be able to see him every day if I was imprisoned, but it would just be too painful knowing that I wouldn’t be “with” him. At least away at school, I would be able to communicate and interact with him, even if it be from a distance. These requests might seem strange to some people, but these are two attributes of my day that would truly make me happy.
Freedom is hard to describe. It is liberation, the lifting of weight off your shoulders. For me freedom is represented in music. To be as free as an unwritten symphony is freedom. With the dozens of instruments, chords, notes and melodies there are endless possibilities to envision, to create, and to embrace (Tricolon). Though music may sound similar, there is never a piece that is played the same way twice. I also wish to be as free as a daydream, taking me to faraway places I didn’t know existed. From a mozzarella castle in the middle of Iceland, to a grape drink Jacuzzi, daydreams are unbounded (FAST). For me, freedom is simply the ability to imagine, be that musically or musingly.
I am not free. There is always some constraint, some imposition, some unappreciated task (Tricolon) that holds me from achieving complete freedom, such as a school essay. But even then freedom is found, in spurs of words, and jumbles of wisdom. There is freedom everywhere, but the only way to see it is to not concentrate on breaking out of prisons, but to concentrate on nothing in particular, and to just wonder.

4 comments:

Scaruso said...

Kimo

Nice job! I really enjoyed your opening pargraph because it was very crisp and clean. I am not sure if its something weird with your computer but I can not tell where you first body paragraph ends and you second begins. Also I do not see your tricolon or FAST words. These are easy things to fix, so otherwise A+!
-Scarlet

Kate Scott said...

Kimo-
good job Kimo you writing was very nice. I feel that there was some unclear sentences in your writing. if you read over your writing i think you will find them and change them a little. i also dont think your full essay is on the blog but it may just be the spacing. so you should fix that too. i really enjoyed reading about how you felt about the songs and the memoris you had from it. GOOD JOB ON YOUR ESSAY!
-Kate

Anonymous said...

Please-This is not my whole essay. Please check back later so that you can read it. I'm having some computer problems, and promise to have it up by 7:00.

pverhoeff said...

Kimo, this was a very interesting essay. But there was one sentence i didn't understand, "And I simply couldn’t live with, and yet simply I must." Another suggestion would be to label your special requirements. Lastly, I especially enjoyed reading your daydreams of cheese castles, and a grape drink jacuzzi HA! Overall, awesome essay!